I am a Year 8 learner in Room 2 at Pt England School in Auckland, NZ.
My teacher is Ms. Tapuke.
Kia ora Sabrina - I enjoyed reading your paragraph for the Term 3 Immersion Assembly in Week !. You have started with your main idea in your TOPIC SENTENCE and then added further relevant information using SUPPORTING DETAILS to explain more about what each team of teachers presented at the assembly. What was your overall impression of the Immersion Assembly? In one sentence, how could you sum up your thoughts and ideas. This would make a strong concluding sentence and make your reader want to find out more! Well done!